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Enjoy the angst too though. - Also, just so you all know, Aries probably ended up getting back a good half hour after Cal and Leroy sooo, yeah. Just to put time into perspective, I guess. Edited at September 12, 2021 11:01 PM by Overthink101
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Overthink: Horrible things happing to wonderful (broken) people at the hands of terrible monsters people. Canis: Ha ha, forest child go brrr
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Lmao. I love that post, Socrates. The angst is perfection *chef's kiss*
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Thanks- Did it flow right? I keep thinking that some of Jacob's responses climaxed too quickly, but I'm not sure if that fits for the character or not and I'm not even sure if it actually did go too fast or not. Lost Memories said: Lmao. I love that post, Socrates. The angst is perfection *chef's kiss*
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I think it was pretty well-written. The speed at which Jacob escalated made him seem either a tad unhinged or very good at manipulation. I got both feelings from what he said, and I think that's what you were intending? It makes Jacob seem more than just your 'typical' (Ugh, it sucks that there even IS a 'typical') abusive SO who does mad drugs and is about as repulsive as humanly possible. Yeah, he's still a fucking disgusting mass of old glue and rancid peanut butter mixed with an astonishing amount of razor-sharp shavings of aluminum, but it's not just a smear across the nearest dingy subway-tunnel wall. It's a pile that somebody dropped in the middle of the village market and the garbage boys are all dealing with other problems right now so everyone's just got to deal. And everybody who needs to go to the market to buy their groceries or whatever has to kind of ignore it and that one kid who got curious, poked it, and got sucked into the unfathomable depths. I'm sorry, I feel the need to appologize for putting that image into anyone's head. I have problems, they can't be fixed by human means.
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I laughed while reading this, I don't know if that makes me worse than your or not but I won't apologize either way lmao. - Yeah, he's supposed to have something called Intermittent Explosive Disorder(Very easy to anger, over anything at all, anger is veryyy big and explosive too) and also be a hugely possessive, obsessive, and manipulative prick. Soooo, hopefully that was written right. Canis Inanis said: I think it was pretty well-written. The speed at which Jacob escalated made him seem either a tad unhinged or very good at manipulation. I got both feelings from what he said, and I think that's what you were intending? It makes Jacob seem more than just your 'typical' (Ugh, it sucks that there even IS a 'typical') abusive SO who does mad drugs and is about as repulsive as humanly possible. Yeah, he's still a fucking disgusting mass of old glue and rancid peanut butter mixed with an astonishing amount of razor-sharp shavings of aluminum, but it's not just a smear across the nearest dingy subway-tunnel wall. It's a pile that somebody dropped in the middle of the village market and the garbage boys are all dealing with other problems right now so everyone's just got to deal. And everybody who needs to go to the market to buy their groceries or whatever has to kind of ignore it and that one kid who got curious, poked it, and got sucked into the unfathomable depths. I'm sorry, I feel the need to appologize for putting that image into anyone's head. I have problems, they can't be fixed by human means.
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I try, yo. And I think it did. I could feel the 'terrible sapient entity' vibes from through the screen.
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I'm glad. Jacob's actually kind of fun to write, just because I love to tor- Develop my characters through vast amounts of angst. Canis Inanis said: I try, yo. And I think it did. I could feel the 'terrible sapient entity' vibes from through the screen.
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Do not fear, the angst positively (Negatively?) oozed through your writing. If the amount of angst I felt from that one singular post could be quantified in Venezuelan Bolivars, I would have enough to buy a mansion on several acres of beachfront land in California.
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