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10:36:10 Will
@Hades

Trust me, it really was *such* a good place the first three years. Things took a turn for the worst last year after the head chef left :(

I'm not sad for leaving it now, as it is, but more so for the fact that it's not the same place it was when I started?
And I'll miss the regulars, but thankfully it's such a neighborhood area I can easily go pop into another restaurant on the street to see them
 Spookybeast
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Oh lord
It has been sent 💀🤞
 Hades
10:34:02 
Spookybeast, oh no! Don't take it as a value judgement. I'm sure there's *something* at that job that potentially would have got me but I just didn't stick around long enough to find out.

Keeping a job that sounds... frankly, pretty chaotic for that long is super admirable though.

Are you a bit sad about leaving?
 Spookybeast
10:31:51 Will
@Hades

LMAO
In my defense
That was my first time crying in that position since I started, as a highschooler

Otherwise I would've chewed out every coworker I had about who was supposed to be taking care of the book when I'm not there X'D
 Spookybeast
10:30:44 Will
@Hades

Coolio perfect!
It's always odd looking with weekend shifts >>

 Hades
10:30:24 
Spookybeast, see? That was my issue. All of the other hosts were *really* sensitive and would cry so people were a lot less harsh with them.

I couldn't cry about that sort of stuff even if I wanted to so people were always emboldened to be so much worse to me, HAHA. Like I assure you sir, if I could muster up some feels about this, I'd feel them just for you. <|3
 Hades
10:29:15 
Spookybeast, yep, think so. Threw me for a loop for a second too.
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 Spookybeast
10:28:22 Will
@Hades

Omg I had a six top walk in for a reservation that wasn't in the book

I straight up cried and they felt so bad they went across the street💀
 Hades
10:27:28 
Spookybeast, I'm the same, unfortunately. I always talk big game about jobs but I kind of pride myself on being able to stick out what others can't and customers at my job always *loved* me.

But uh, yeah. Feel you there. Or when people wouldn't write down reservations for significant parties (like 20+) and then they'd show up asking for their table and I had to tell them it would be a 2 hour wait because no one took them down. .-.

Send it! I'm sure it'll feel like a massive weight off your back as soon as it's done.
 Spookybeast
10:27:18 Will
Someone help me do a quick math check >>

If I'm working Friday + Saturday
And two weeks from today is Thursday, the 21st,
That means my last day would be the 16th?
 MLadySkylar
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My dad sent me a picture of the grave he dug for my cat,
I can't keep the tears away ;-;
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 Spookybeast
10:24:49 Will
@Hades

I stuck around because we have some regulars and they made it slightly bearable
But yeah this past week was ... God
ToT
People were writing 7:00 reservations before 5:00???
Like I don't even know how you mess up that bad
It screwed up the whole night

Sending my message to the boss man now X"D
 Hades
10:22:33 
Spookybeast, I would give a 5 seconds notice at that rate.

Ohhh... yeah, as soon as you said host, I knew. My most recent job was a hostess job, HELL. Complete hell. But I still stuck it out for a year and some change.

... I quit because my job was deplorable and I still never had to do that. Step-by-step instructions, are you for real?

What was the final straw if that wasn't? xD
 Spookybeast
10:22:23 Will
Omg also we don't get tips at the end of the night anymore
They're put into our paychecks
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Writing TipsMay 25, 2018 10:28 AM


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Disclaimer: If you ever find a writing tip that they say has no exceptions, you should never listen to it. In other words, writing tips ALWAYS can be twisted and broken.

However, the reason writing tips exist is for writers to GRASP a certain concept. You must master the concept to start breaking and playing with it.

For example, art. You MUST learn the anatomy before you decide to stylize it and make it your own. Otherwise, it's just... not good.

I am NotanExpert, but I hope you find these helpful. Be aware that there are exceptions to all of these, but it's important to know them first, which is why these are here.

Please post if anything helped you or if you want something to be covered. If you want critique on your piece, feel free to post it here; looking at critique from other people can be very helpful. If you want to keep it private, feel free to PM me. I will critique and see what can be made better by breaking it down.

Edited at May 25, 2018 10:35 AM by a m b e r
Writing TipsMay 25, 2018 10:49 AM


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Epithets

If you don't know what an epithet is, it's like a little description tag. For example:

Loki, the God of Mischief
Athena, the gray-eyed
Liberty, the paint horse
the male
the taller man

For the most part, don't use them when the epithet is not relevant. Otherwise it's just unnecessary and jarring. Take a look at this:

"I love you," said the blond man.

The reason that "the blond man" part is unnecessary is because you don't have to know that. Like first of all, who cares? And second of all, it completely doesn't fit the mood. Epithets are just clinical and ugly.

However, you may need to know it for context or to differentiate new characters.

"I love you," said Thor to his wayward brother.

He turned the corner, only to see two men waiting there; the taller one cracked his knuckles, stalking toward him menacingly.

Based on the epithet in the first example, you can probably figure out that Thor is saying he loves his brother even though he's terrible. In the second one, you don't know their names, so the epithet's relevant.

Don't use epithets to replace someone's name/pronoun repeatedly. It's OKAY to repeat their name or pronoun!!!

Edited at June 9, 2018 11:40 AM by a m b e r
Writing TipsMay 25, 2018 11:09 AM


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Change your sentence structures.

As you may know, there are several types of sentences:

Simple: He cried.
Compound: He cried, and then he threw a fit.
Complex: He cried because he was upset.
Compound-Complex: He cried, and then he threw a fit because he decided to be exceptionally obnoxious.

Longer sentences and clauses tend to slow down the action. It's like a movie scene where they do slow-mo and have muted music.

Shorter sentences are fast and quicken the action.

You will need both throughout your piece accordingly.

Edited at May 26, 2018 09:31 AM by a m b e r
Writing TipsMay 25, 2018 11:19 AM


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How to punctuate dialogue correctly

What is a dialogue tag? These are things like he said, she screamed, he whispered, she remarked.

WRONG: "No." she screamed.
WRONG: "No," She screamed.

It's one sentence still, so it should be a comma, not a period.
The second one's wrong because why should "She" be capitalized?

RIGHT: "No," she screamed.
RIGHT: "No." She screamed.

The first one is the most common. It's saying that she's screaming the word "no".
The second one is saying that she says "no" and THEN screams. So this depends on what you want.

This happens in other punctuation marks as well:

RIGHT: "No!" she screamed. (She screams it)
RIGHT: "No!" She screamed.
(She says "no" and then screams)

These are NOT dialogue tags: he laughed/chuckled, she smiled, he jumped, she drank.

This is because you cannot laugh words, smile words, jump words, or show words through drinking. It makes no sense. Therefore, the character must have spoken before or after that action:

WRONG: "Thanks," he laughed.
WRONG: "What?" she smiled.

RIGHT: "Thanks." He laughed.
RIGHT: "What?" She smiled.

Edited at May 25, 2018 11:20 AM by a m b e r
Writing TipsMay 26, 2018 07:11 AM


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"No." She screamed.

This is too vague. A line break makes sense in this case, but this would be for two characters.

"No."

She screamed.

"She screamed" is a dialogue tag and the reader would expect to see "No!" she screamed, or "No!" She let out a scream.
Writing TipsMay 26, 2018 09:29 AM


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Catoctin Furnace said:.


I see; I had wanted to clearly differentiate the two and how the two "right"s differ instead of focusing on the words, but you are completely correct that that should be used instead.

Thank you for your clarification!

Edited at May 26, 2018 09:33 AM by a m b e r
Writing TipsMay 29, 2018 12:02 PM


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Motivations

If you're struggling to make your audience care for your character, give them a motivation. As Kurt Vonnegut said, "Every character should want something, even if it is only a glass of water." This is immensely helpful in moving the plot and making the audience root for that goal, so if you're struggling to move the story forward and have a purpose, make sure that your characters have something they want. They probably have one, even if you don't realize it.

This works in RP posts, too. Give your character a goal. I suppose this is why crushes are so popular in RPs -- not only do they tie your character to others, but essentially, it is a motivation.

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