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 distant-screams
06:08:38 katy | beetle
unfortunately i'm just using a base since they'll be premades but i now want to own an anthro ferret oc..
 Ecifircas
06:06:23 
distant-screams, no problem. lmao

I think a ferret would just be super cute in your style. I'm interested to see how you'd convey their lank in anthro form. lol
 distant-screams
06:04:54 katy | beetle
Ecifircas,
thank you for the sensible suggestions <3

i'll definitely do a ferret, that sounds fun.
 Boeing
06:04:30 Boe is a bear, Rawr!
XD chipmunk!
(No idea why I said that lol)
 Ecifircas
06:03:59 
distant-screams, rabbit, wolverine, ferret.
 distant-screams
06:03:39 katy | beetle
i don't think i could physically draw an anthro jumping spider with my skillset </3

i think i'll do the bat, bunny, and maybe chipmunk.. i'm undecided
 Ecifircas
06:03:26 
Goddess Juno, to improve your pack happiness, you need to make sure all of your wolves have "Good" or "Excellent" affinity with your pack and that all of your wolves have staggered dominance.

However, if you have a wolf currently that has subpar affinity and you want to change that, you can buy the 'Make Friends' item under Realm > Marketplace > Barter > Apples > Wolf Items for 2 apples. :-)
 Boeing
06:02:55 Boe is a bear, Rawr!
Most random animals xD
 Goddess Juno
06:02:46 Juno (he/they)
or a tarantula!
 distant-screams
06:02:30 katy | beetle
oh lord y'all are throwing some wild ideas :'D
 Amygdala
06:02:27 Amy/Anpmygdala
Katy
Bat, lion, bunny
 OCCULTIST
06:02:05 Man Lover
would you accept a jumping spider as an animal with fur
 Boeing
06:01:58 Boe is a bear, Rawr!
Chipmunk
 Goddess Juno
06:01:52 Juno (he/they)
katy: maybe an anteater or a platypus? I think they have fur
 distant-screams
06:01:04 katy | beetle
anyone have 3 random species ideas for anthro adopts?

they gotta have fur
 Goddess Juno
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how do I improve the affinity of one of my wolves?
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I dont wanna be a broke college student :)December 31, 2022 06:34 PM


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Getting straight into it. I have this little scholarship essay, a looming due date, and nobody to look over it for me. Help?

Prompt: What are your education and Career Goals? How do you plan on impacting your community in the future?

Essay: Min- 250. Max-500. Current- 261

Revised: 258 words.

My name is []. I'm a senior at [] High School, and my goal, once I graduate, is to pursue an Associate Degree in Baking and Pastry Arts and a Bachelor's in Food and Beverage Management at [] & [] University. This will prepare me for owning my own business in the future. What made me desire a career in this field? My passion for baking, as well as the sheer joy I felt when seeing others enjoy the dishes I made The happiness that I was able to create using nothing but my hands and mediocre skills gave me a sense of fulfillment. I then knew that, unlike other hobbies I had tried, this was what I truly enjoyed and wished to spend time furthering my knowledge of. When I first had the thought of owning my own business, I didn't think of doing much with it. Before long, I began to think of all the good I could do for those in situations that I could have been in, had I not been so fortunate. My wish is to create a community filled with acceptance and warmth by using any business I create. What I wish to do is hire certain nonviolent criminals and those who are beginning to age out of the foster care system, therefore giving a second chance to those who need it. This scholarship would allow me to gain the skills necessary to not only survive but thrive in my chosen field, as well as use my experience to help others thrive.


Edited at December 31, 2022 08:21 PM by Flower Field
I dont wanna be a broke college student :)December 31, 2022 06:43 PM


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It's good, but I feel like there are still some things you could improve
I dont wanna be a broke college student :)December 31, 2022 06:46 PM


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Heyo, I would replace a bit of your wording;
"while also" -> "in addition to",
"Before too long, however," -> "Not too long after".
Apologies if this was vague or didn't make sense, I'm a little tired hehe. There's a whole list somewhere, but I forgot what it's called.
However if your school has a career center or similar, I do recommend going there or asking a trusted teacher!
I dont wanna be a broke college student :)December 31, 2022 06:54 PM


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It does help! Also, I wish I could ask a teacher to look it over but the due date is before winter break is over so most of my teachers aren't checking their email.

Wilted said:
Heyo, I would replace a bit of your wording;
"while also" -> "in addition to",
"Before too long, however," -> "Not too long after".
Apologies if this was vague or didn't make sense, I'm a little tired hehe. There's a whole list somewhere, but I forgot what it's called.
However if your school has a career center or similar, I do recommend going there or asking a trusted teacher!


I dont wanna be a broke college student :)December 31, 2022 07:08 PM


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Edited at December 31, 2022 07:53 PM by Flower Field
I dont wanna be a broke college student :)December 31, 2022 07:20 PM


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Hmm, have you tried reading this out loud? There's a lot of commas/pauses. I wouldn't exactly try to compress everything into one sentence, as that can be a mouthful (brainful? I'm still tired).
Try splitting them up a bit?
I dont wanna be a broke college student :)December 31, 2022 08:30 PM


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Try to change "What made me desire a career in this field? My passion for baking, as well as the sheer joy I felt when seeing others enjoy the dishes I made" to:
My passion for baking made me desire a career in this field, as well as the sheer joy I felt when seeing others enjoy the dishes I made.
I dont wanna be a broke college student :)December 31, 2022 08:33 PM


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Be sure to add a period between 'made' and 'the'
My passion for baking, as well as the sheer joy I felt when seeing others enjoy the dishes I made The happiness that I was able to create using nothing but my hands and mediocre skills gave me a sense of fulfillment.
Should be
My passion for baking, as well as the sheer joy I felt when seeing others enjoy the dishes I made. The happiness that I was able to create using nothing but my hands and mediocre skills gave me a sense of fulfillment.
I dont wanna be a broke college student :)December 31, 2022 08:34 PM


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I'm just pointing out minor things that need to be fixed for now
I dont wanna be a broke college student :)December 31, 2022 08:35 PM


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Wow, kinda embarrassed I didn't notice I forgot a period lol
Also, I appreciate any and all help!

Edited at December 31, 2022 08:36 PM by Flower Field

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