It's fine, aha. I meant if Taipan and Frosch were pitted against each other, and Frosch ran away before Tai could even attack, would it be a stalemate?

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Also, the chapter's really good. *^*

There's a few places that might need to be edited (just because there's some words missing in places), but that's about it. ^^

It's quite interesting, so points there too, aha. :D

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If you want, and when I've got more time, I can PM you the areas, so you can just search 'em (ctrl+F) and fix 'em instead of having to read through it. ^^'

Missing words aren't that terrible- (for now) but thanks for letting me know ^^

I think Tai would still win XD

1. Ooh padda would be honored to know Tai's name but the little jerk may try to blackmail him with it in the future if the occasion arises

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2. If Frosch is backed into a corner, tai would win all the way (I'm so sorry Frosch I luv u >.<)

if he tries to run, Kämpe may just be inclined to stop him so 👀

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3. I think the chapter is really good! I only read to the five page cut off though. There's a few minor wording stuff you could clean up, but other than that, I really like it. And I also love the names you choose for all the chars *^*

Filler
Ohoho- I shall read it (and all the other chapters because I forgot) soon- when its not 1 AM...

Spaghetti
Thank you! I had a lot of fun with the names ^^
What kind of wording things? Missing words like what Onyx mentioned or wordy/poor choice? If its the later, please tell me where when you have the time!

And is it interesting enough up to the five page marker? Because most of the start is just description and explaining, and I want to make sure its not too much for the reader/boring right away...

I'm crying-
I wasted all my savings-

wHy

Wildfire was going to have pups, and I was impatient-
I wasted EVERYTHING-
Apple prices went up 150 mush from yesterday-
And so now all I have is 17 mush-

Silver

:0 I love it! Definitely let us know when the next chapter comes out!

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Doom

Some wording that could be better here and there, but I'll try to look at it tomorrow when I'm more awake and help you out

And I thought it was interesting. I think the cliffhanger/chapters that start out in action scenes may end up being more intruiging, but your chapter has really good writing and is detailed, so I think it balances itself out.

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Celery

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w h y

like I know why but w h y