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 Eternity
02:59:03 ET
Wilvy
Absolutely! Always best to be cautious, people get up to some weird shit these days.

Yeahh, that certainly adds to the stakes :[
Sounds like a good idea for sure though. Always such a mood dampener to run into iffy people like that
 Red River Wolves
02:58:34 Redd Dead
Rev,
I thought it was just me lol
 Revelry
02:57:36 Rev
WP started to lag so hard out of nowhere
 Red River Wolves
02:56:32 Redd Dead
Boe,
So add "get a higher score on slither so Boe can never reach it" to my to-do list? Got it
 Spookybeast
02:55:49 Will
@Etea

Yeah 😭
And I'm always cautious in places like the downtown main transportation center since that place gets rough

Plus just
Being a young woman rip:')
When wheelchair guy caught his bus I sat next to some other women instead

@Boe

All things considered my city has pretty ok transportation, at least in terms of that. I've never seen a driver let someone get on while high or smoking
 Purgatory
02:54:48 Purge/Purse/Pug
Does Gwyn drop brains or only bone fragments
 Boeing
02:53:37 Boe is a bear, Rawr!
Red, Amt
I'm beating you in Slither one day. No question about that
 Eternity
02:53:23 ET
Wilvy
Nah I get you. For some reason strangers always think I'm the one to talk to whilst I'm waiting for buses/trains/etc. Which is mostly right, I'm happy to talk to strangers but MAN the shit people have said to me 😭

Absolutely though yeah, sometimes you just get off vibes from a person. Blasting music in public doesn't exactly help.
But damn 😭 looks like he felt the off vibes too
 Boeing
02:53:19 Boe is a bear, Rawr!
Will
Oh my god city buses xD
Those idiots high on I don't even know what vaping at the back of the bus and blaring music ToT
 Amygdala
02:52:46 Amy/Anpmygdala
Plane
You will have to beat me in slither first XD
 Malcuth
02:52:45 Wander
-WP Click-
Should I bones her? I think she's pretty but useless to me
 Red River Wolves
02:52:34 Redd Dead
Amy,
Please take care of yourself and don't be a (too terribly) sweaty gamer
 Amygdala
02:52:06 Amy/Anpmygdala
Plane, redd
Thanks for battles XD

I might be back a bit later for a few more rounds. Let me just shower real fast ;)
 Spookybeast
02:51:40 Will
Just
Honestly not the weirdest stuff I've dealt with
One time I had to watch someone's trombone while they helped people back out of entering a one way tunnel 💀
 Boeing
02:50:50 Boe is a bear, Rawr!
Red
I'm beating you one day on Slither >:^

Alright I'll spam it Amt
 Spookybeast
02:50:37 Will
@Etea

So I always am cautious but like
Friendly? If that makes sense
Because 99% of the time people taking the city bus are just people like me who need to, and we're all waiting for our buses.

But the other 1% 😭✌️

So I'm chatting with this guy who's in a wheelchair and telling me about his cats

And this other older man pulls up dressed up all red and blasting music and dancing around which
Ok
Cool for you I guess but also :'D
Red flags/tells me to be wary

Wheel chair guy actually wheeled to be closer to me/block other guy off TvT
 The Night Walker
02:50:36 Anemoia/Aedra
Asmodeus
Mr Sassypants is the true familiar
 Amygdala
02:50:16 Amy/Anpmygdala
Okay i am going to poof after this last battle. I need to wash my hair and sleep
 Caeruleum
02:49:16 Cae, Blue
Viti and leuc in the same litter :')
 Red River Wolves
02:48:24 Redd Dead
Boe,
I still have the slither high score, and we all know that's the true measure of success on WP. Amy did get ridiculously close though, on mobile too

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Writing TipsMay 25, 2018 10:28 AM


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Disclaimer: If you ever find a writing tip that they say has no exceptions, you should never listen to it. In other words, writing tips ALWAYS can be twisted and broken.

However, the reason writing tips exist is for writers to GRASP a certain concept. You must master the concept to start breaking and playing with it.

For example, art. You MUST learn the anatomy before you decide to stylize it and make it your own. Otherwise, it's just... not good.

I am NotanExpert, but I hope you find these helpful. Be aware that there are exceptions to all of these, but it's important to know them first, which is why these are here.

Please post if anything helped you or if you want something to be covered. If you want critique on your piece, feel free to post it here; looking at critique from other people can be very helpful. If you want to keep it private, feel free to PM me. I will critique and see what can be made better by breaking it down.

Edited at May 25, 2018 10:35 AM by a m b e r
Writing TipsMay 25, 2018 10:49 AM


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Epithets

If you don't know what an epithet is, it's like a little description tag. For example:

Loki, the God of Mischief
Athena, the gray-eyed
Liberty, the paint horse
the male
the taller man

For the most part, don't use them when the epithet is not relevant. Otherwise it's just unnecessary and jarring. Take a look at this:

"I love you," said the blond man.

The reason that "the blond man" part is unnecessary is because you don't have to know that. Like first of all, who cares? And second of all, it completely doesn't fit the mood. Epithets are just clinical and ugly.

However, you may need to know it for context or to differentiate new characters.

"I love you," said Thor to his wayward brother.

He turned the corner, only to see two men waiting there; the taller one cracked his knuckles, stalking toward him menacingly.

Based on the epithet in the first example, you can probably figure out that Thor is saying he loves his brother even though he's terrible. In the second one, you don't know their names, so the epithet's relevant.

Don't use epithets to replace someone's name/pronoun repeatedly. It's OKAY to repeat their name or pronoun!!!

Edited at June 9, 2018 11:40 AM by a m b e r
Writing TipsMay 25, 2018 11:09 AM


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Change your sentence structures.

As you may know, there are several types of sentences:

Simple: He cried.
Compound: He cried, and then he threw a fit.
Complex: He cried because he was upset.
Compound-Complex: He cried, and then he threw a fit because he decided to be exceptionally obnoxious.

Longer sentences and clauses tend to slow down the action. It's like a movie scene where they do slow-mo and have muted music.

Shorter sentences are fast and quicken the action.

You will need both throughout your piece accordingly.

Edited at May 26, 2018 09:31 AM by a m b e r
Writing TipsMay 25, 2018 11:19 AM


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How to punctuate dialogue correctly

What is a dialogue tag? These are things like he said, she screamed, he whispered, she remarked.

WRONG: "No." she screamed.
WRONG: "No," She screamed.

It's one sentence still, so it should be a comma, not a period.
The second one's wrong because why should "She" be capitalized?

RIGHT: "No," she screamed.
RIGHT: "No." She screamed.

The first one is the most common. It's saying that she's screaming the word "no".
The second one is saying that she says "no" and THEN screams. So this depends on what you want.

This happens in other punctuation marks as well:

RIGHT: "No!" she screamed. (She screams it)
RIGHT: "No!" She screamed.
(She says "no" and then screams)

These are NOT dialogue tags: he laughed/chuckled, she smiled, he jumped, she drank.

This is because you cannot laugh words, smile words, jump words, or show words through drinking. It makes no sense. Therefore, the character must have spoken before or after that action:

WRONG: "Thanks," he laughed.
WRONG: "What?" she smiled.

RIGHT: "Thanks." He laughed.
RIGHT: "What?" She smiled.

Edited at May 25, 2018 11:20 AM by a m b e r
Writing TipsMay 26, 2018 07:11 AM


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"No." She screamed.

This is too vague. A line break makes sense in this case, but this would be for two characters.

"No."

She screamed.

"She screamed" is a dialogue tag and the reader would expect to see "No!" she screamed, or "No!" She let out a scream.
Writing TipsMay 26, 2018 09:29 AM


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Catoctin Furnace said:.


I see; I had wanted to clearly differentiate the two and how the two "right"s differ instead of focusing on the words, but you are completely correct that that should be used instead.

Thank you for your clarification!

Edited at May 26, 2018 09:33 AM by a m b e r
Writing TipsMay 29, 2018 12:02 PM


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Motivations

If you're struggling to make your audience care for your character, give them a motivation. As Kurt Vonnegut said, "Every character should want something, even if it is only a glass of water." This is immensely helpful in moving the plot and making the audience root for that goal, so if you're struggling to move the story forward and have a purpose, make sure that your characters have something they want. They probably have one, even if you don't realize it.

This works in RP posts, too. Give your character a goal. I suppose this is why crushes are so popular in RPs -- not only do they tie your character to others, but essentially, it is a motivation.

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